This article is about the conflict between free agent quarterback Colin Kaepernick and NFL commissioner Roger Goodell about an invitation to have a meeting regarding the hearing, but the NFL kept changing their thoughts on a meeting.
What the reporter did well was give the inside scoop of what happened between the confusion between both sides. Kaepernick requested a mediator to help in this decision but the NFL rejected his proposal. They journalist did a nice job of providing evidence and telling a story instead of throwing it around all over the place. Also adding in at the last two paragraphs about the history of what happened provided clarity to the reader.
What the reporter could have done better was rename the headline to what they actual topic is. While it did involve a mediator that wasn't the main subject of the article. It was about how the mediator affected the possibility of a meeting.
Overall this week technically I haven't done a whole lot other than lower thirds, and completing them for other classmates. I am also on highlights from fall sports and been going through to improve my editing skills and writing skills by writing these blogs every week.
http://www.espn.com/nfl/story/_/id/21330563/nfl-invited-colin-kaepernick-meet-one-one-roger-goodell-league-spokesman-says
Thursday, November 9, 2017
Thursday, November 2, 2017
Weekly Blog 11/3
This article is about how the pizza company of Papa John's is very upset with the NFL, and how they handled the anthem protests. CEO John Schnatter said that the company was receiving less advertisements, and that the NFL is not showing good leadership. Now other major companies are getting rubbed the wrong way with their partnership with the NFL.
What the reporter did well was list all of the companies that were having issues with advertising or partnership questions. Giving specific companies like PepsiCo, Microsoft, Nationwide, PG, etc. Also, giving specific detail by including statements from other high executives from companies like Dannon and Hyundai.
What the reporter could improve on is provide more information about how the stock went down. There was only one little sentence explaining that the stock only went down by 8.5%. Providing more specific detail about the numbers standpoint of reasons why the sales were going down would have been a nice addition.
What I could do is I liked at the very end the reporter used statements and quotes from 5 of the other sponsors, to show who was all involved in the situation with the NFL and their thoughts on the issue. This would be beneficial on getting other sources to help support a story that I work on so that it makes the story more interesting and intriguing.
This week I feel like I have showed the example of what a feature story is supposed to kind of be like except for the length and not using 2 interviews.
http://www.espn.com/nfl/story/_/id/21250448/nfl-sponsor-papa-john-not-happy-anthem-protests
What the reporter did well was list all of the companies that were having issues with advertising or partnership questions. Giving specific companies like PepsiCo, Microsoft, Nationwide, PG, etc. Also, giving specific detail by including statements from other high executives from companies like Dannon and Hyundai.
What the reporter could improve on is provide more information about how the stock went down. There was only one little sentence explaining that the stock only went down by 8.5%. Providing more specific detail about the numbers standpoint of reasons why the sales were going down would have been a nice addition.
What I could do is I liked at the very end the reporter used statements and quotes from 5 of the other sponsors, to show who was all involved in the situation with the NFL and their thoughts on the issue. This would be beneficial on getting other sources to help support a story that I work on so that it makes the story more interesting and intriguing.
This week I feel like I have showed the example of what a feature story is supposed to kind of be like except for the length and not using 2 interviews.
http://www.espn.com/nfl/story/_/id/21250448/nfl-sponsor-papa-john-not-happy-anthem-protests
Friday, October 27, 2017
Weekly Blog 10/27
This article is about the Lonzo Ball and the LA Lakers, and how many NBA players are drawing a target on his back. Lately NBA point guards have been all over Ball like Patrick Beverly and John Wall.
What the reporter did well was that they included a large amount of information from the coach Luke Walton. They also included in-game details of opportunity of what happened with an average performance by Lonzo Ball. For example, giving details on how he would make the next 3-pointer since he missed the first one.
What the reporter needs to work on is use soundbytes from sources that actually fit into the story. They added some from Lonzo's dad, Lavar, that were not necessary and was a distraction to the main topic of the matchup between Ball and Wall.
Overall, I think I need to add a lot more in-depth content when writing about a story or incident that occurred. Even though recaps are much harder, its very important to include as much detail of possible, while also providing the correct information.
http://www.espn.com/nba/story/_/id/21158474/lonzo-ball-los-angeles-lakers-emerges-win-matchup-wizards-john-wall
What the reporter did well was that they included a large amount of information from the coach Luke Walton. They also included in-game details of opportunity of what happened with an average performance by Lonzo Ball. For example, giving details on how he would make the next 3-pointer since he missed the first one.
What the reporter needs to work on is use soundbytes from sources that actually fit into the story. They added some from Lonzo's dad, Lavar, that were not necessary and was a distraction to the main topic of the matchup between Ball and Wall.
Overall, I think I need to add a lot more in-depth content when writing about a story or incident that occurred. Even though recaps are much harder, its very important to include as much detail of possible, while also providing the correct information.
http://www.espn.com/nba/story/_/id/21158474/lonzo-ball-los-angeles-lakers-emerges-win-matchup-wizards-john-wall
Friday, October 13, 2017
Weekly Blog 10/13
This article is on the U.S Men's National Soccer Team and how they were eliminated from contention for the World Cup by Trinidad and Tobago.
What the journalist did well was give a summary of the awful loss by USA and explain now what the role will be for them. I also liked how they inserted a tweet from a foreign person and their reaction to USA losing.
What I didn't like was that the article did not go into detail, and was only a couple of paragraphs long. The journalist could have done a better job of showing tweets from citizens on their thoughts of the game, as well as, provide more opinion on the game itself.
What I would use in my work is using different sources to relay information and get people's reaction of events that happened to strengthen the angle of my story.
https://www.cbssports.com/soccer/news/usa-eliminated-from-2018-world-cup-in-following-shocking-loss-to-trinidad-and-tobago/
Friday, September 29, 2017
Weekly Blog 9/29
This article is about the Louisville University Men's Basketball coaching staff and their FBI investigation that may affect changes in the staff of head coach Rick Pitino and athletic director Tom Jurich.
What the reporter did well was explain how many allegations from Pitino and Louisville led up to potentially firing him with being very descriptive and typing more than 3-5 paragraphs. The body was descriptive into telling who was involved like Adidas who intentionally gave money to recruits in order to sign the shoe deal and school that sponsors the brand.
The reporter didn't do well was it took me a while to figure out who was speaking in the video, it didn't give the same information as it was in the article. It also kept consistently going back and forth between Pitino and the assistant coaches from other schools and it got off topic to what the headline said.
How I would use this in my own work is being able to dig deep, and find something in the past that is a pattern that I can mention. Also being very detailed in what s going on will help a reader understand on more to what is going on.
http://www.espn.com/mens-college-basketball/story/_/id/20834710/louisville-head-coach-rick-pitino-athletic-director-tom-jurich-put-leave
What the reporter did well was explain how many allegations from Pitino and Louisville led up to potentially firing him with being very descriptive and typing more than 3-5 paragraphs. The body was descriptive into telling who was involved like Adidas who intentionally gave money to recruits in order to sign the shoe deal and school that sponsors the brand.
The reporter didn't do well was it took me a while to figure out who was speaking in the video, it didn't give the same information as it was in the article. It also kept consistently going back and forth between Pitino and the assistant coaches from other schools and it got off topic to what the headline said.
How I would use this in my own work is being able to dig deep, and find something in the past that is a pattern that I can mention. Also being very detailed in what s going on will help a reader understand on more to what is going on.
http://www.espn.com/mens-college-basketball/story/_/id/20834710/louisville-head-coach-rick-pitino-athletic-director-tom-jurich-put-leave
Friday, September 15, 2017
Weekly Blog 9/15
Last night the Kansas City Royals took on the hottest team in baseball, the Cleveland Indians at Progressive Field in Cleveland, OH. The Royals were looking to end the Indians streak of 21 consecutive games.
In this article the reporter did well of including quotes from players to implement the frustration of the season that the Royals are having. They also did well at including specific events in the correct order of what they happened leading up to the walk-off.
What the reporter could have done better was add more of a positive attitude towards the situation with Herrera and that he's just been struggling. Also, maybe if they included quotes from Jake Junis the starter from last night that could have added a different perspective.
How I'm going to add this into my packages is being able to be more specific on a play that happens and give the who, what, where, when of each play.
http://www.kansascity.com/sports/mlb/kansas-city-royals/article173446581.html
In this article the reporter did well of including quotes from players to implement the frustration of the season that the Royals are having. They also did well at including specific events in the correct order of what they happened leading up to the walk-off.
What the reporter could have done better was add more of a positive attitude towards the situation with Herrera and that he's just been struggling. Also, maybe if they included quotes from Jake Junis the starter from last night that could have added a different perspective.
How I'm going to add this into my packages is being able to be more specific on a play that happens and give the who, what, where, when of each play.
http://www.kansascity.com/sports/mlb/kansas-city-royals/article173446581.html
Sunday, September 10, 2017
Weekly Blog 9/8
Chiefs vs Patriots
September 8th 2017
On Thursday the Kansas City Chiefs took on the New England Patriots to open up the NFL Season. This article describes how the Chiefs' defensive plays on 4th down prevailed their win. What the reporter did well was sequence the order of plays that happened including who was involved, where on the field the play happened and the result. They also had quotes from players and coaches that flowed between the topics covered.However the reporter did not do well at getting the head coaches on their thoughts of the game. They could have used a quote from them.
One thing that I will use in my articles is be descriptive on who, what, where, why, how is involved and happening and getting quotes and soundbytes from interviews.
http://www.kansascity.com/sports/nfl/kansas-city-chiefs/article172476791.html
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